Bram, those are SO good! Seriously, that first one made me almost cry. The "others" line at the end was so effective because it broke the pattern of the lines above and it really caught your notice.

The second one was also really good. I'm not just flattering you, either. You really have a talent for this. The images in the first part; they were varied, and you caught an essence of each (daughter-roses; dance-pretty dress, relationship, movement; games-winning! ) Then in the second part, the sadness of waking, but with the stubborn bit of hope ...

Please keep them coming. They're beautiful!