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Senior Member
Join Date: Jun 2013
Location: USA
Posts: 1,232
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Hi D,
Lit Love's editing is SUPER. Best advice you can get.
Now that is good advice. Lit Love's points are superb. It cuts what should be cut but leaves pertinent details. Your friend sounded too clinical and brief in my opinion. (Sounded like a doctor.)
It needs to sound like you, the person applying for benefits, not like a clinician.
Last edited by Jomar; 07-08-2015 at 11:51 PM.
Reason: name edit per request
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