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Old 02-15-2007, 03:53 PM #1
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this is one i wrote while in the hospital recently...

I hold my head back
chin up
arms with hands clasped behind
my back
and the tears begin to fall
one, then two,
maybe a few
just to find their way
down my cheek
to the smooth line of my jaw and on to my neck
cascading down like
a slow waterfall
down, directly in front
over the adam's apple
and into the pool of my
clavical
and I tell myself to fight
Keep the thoughts from reigning negative
In spite of the words
and NO. I don't have to understand.
but I NEED to know
that others DO.
DO Understand
DO Know
DO Love me
DO Understand
And Illness SEEMS so weak to me
But it's not.
It's so
POWERFUL.

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Old 02-16-2007, 08:14 PM #2
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So well written.

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I just wanted people to know, that, I wrote this after a conversation I had with my ex-husband, while I was sick, in the hospital. Where he told me that I had freaked his brother out with my illness. It made me feel really bad. Tears, and, this poem followed that remark.

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Old 04-25-2007, 02:04 PM #4
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ohhh c-girl
dry those tear as they are being wasted upon a foolish person!!!!!!!
maybe SOMEONE should put more care into what they say and not worry about their brother,because everyone I know in this whole big world has some type of defect... no one,or nobody is perfect sweetheart.. not even BMW . I would like to send the cyber hounds after that meanie for making you feel bad. I truely believe that what a person sends out will come back to them ... what goes around shall come back around. You are such a thoughtfull caring kind person that I pray it comes back to you double fold!
Many blessings of strength and sunshine to you , Hope things get better for you fast and STAY that way.
Peace Peace
BMW p.s. I just noticed the date of the poem... but my thoughts are still the same

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BMW is right, CG. Even though that is no longer so much of an issue, you still NEED to KNOW that people know, understand and love you. Being sick does not lessen our desires to be accepted or fulfilled. If anything, it makes them stronger, though often harder to find. You'll find what your looking for. I'm pretty sure of that. Souls like yours are hard to repress.

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