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Old 11-18-2006, 12:25 PM #1
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Default The emotional river

tears as many as the stars in universe
never ending river of salty water pouring down
say words carrying emotions- see my wet eyes
no lock gate, strong enough to hold back this force
sensations playing a vivid game- in the chambers of my heart
sadness rolling in like the mighty tide
covering my cheeks- leaving my chin- falling down on dust
my chest huge in breathing pain- eating up my air
numb features of a soul astray
cry a little while longer
then- let it pass my way
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Old 05-01-2007, 08:07 PM #2
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Absolutely beautiful. I wish I could write this well.

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Old 11-06-2012, 06:49 PM #3
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Default dear poetry lover

that is awsome I to like to write poems they useualy come to me when I am very upset heres one I wrote after my Mother passed away I hope you like it, it's called Don't Morn
Don't morn my passing just let me go,
For I have had a good life even with the sarrow,
I have loved and lost only to start again with family
and children,husbands and even good friends.
Don't morn my passing just let me go,
for my life has just started this you must know,
I'll be watching over you for genartions to come,
your wives, and your husbands,your daughters and sons.
Don't morn my passing just let me go,
for we shall meet again at the cross roads in the Gods say it's so
don't morn my passing just let me go
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sorry messed up last line sapose to read at the cross roads in the end the Gods say it's so
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I'm sorry you are hurting so much PoetryLover but you have a talent for writing for sure.
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tears as many as the stars in universe
never ending river of salty water pouring down
say words carrying emotions- see my wet eyes
no lock gate, strong enough to hold back this force
sensations playing a vivid game- in the chambers of my heart
sadness rolling in like the mighty tide
covering my cheeks- leaving my chin- falling down on dust
my chest huge in breathing pain- eating up my air
numb features of a soul astray
cry a little while longer
then- let it pass my way
A very nice poem indeed. I can feel the emotion. Seems so down and hurting. I also can write poems especially when I am going through something in my life. It is a way to release all the hurt and sure it does work for me. I hope to read more of your work. Good Luck.
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